Connecting People and Nature

As we know the earth is diminishing day by day.

Is this our obligation as humans? Can we fix it? Do YOU want to fix it?

Growing up I’ve always noticed the sad fact that my home is withering away in front of my eyes. We as humans use earth as our home, and  would you let your house wither away into nothing? I don’t think so, I hope… I grew up on Conservation land with my grandparents and family so I believe I’ve had first hand experience. Being able to see pastures clean of pollution, animals that are on their way to extinction protected, even down to little things such as the little noises I would hear in the morning, the peacefulness, is what we need to bring the earth back too.

I remember sitting at my grandmother’s kitchen table for hours listening to stories about my grandfather’s connection to nature. I was mesmerized, that glimmer of hope in my 8 year old eyes was clear. These stories even lead me to pursue a life in saving the earth. On that note, I even went as far in declaring a major in Animal Behavior at my University to understand this whole situation better.

Working with animals ranging from small rodents to exotic zoo animals really opened my eyes to what really needs to happen. We wouldn’t be where we are today if it wasn’t for animals, they provide endless sources for us humans. Not a lot of people think through the whole situation, animals’ lives are ripped apart. This can be in forms of being ripped from their families, their homes demolished, inhuman treatment, etc.

We consider ourselves to be the best of the best, the apex predators. When in reality animals were here first!

Something that I found to be super important was found over on World Animal Protection, the blog author describes how animals are so similar to humans in the article “Empathy, Memory and Dreams: 11 Facts about chickens’ ‘ . The author really sheds light into the topic about how even chickens are able to feel the empathy, memory, and shared dreams humans might have. In other words, killing these chickens inhumanely is like killing another human.

The author described:

1.) Chickens can recognize up to 100 faces

2.) Chickens dream!

3.)Chickens pass down information

4.)Chickens chirp to their eggs

5.)Chickens are Hierarchical

6.)Chickens use past experiences to make decisions

7.)Chicken emphasizes with peers

8.)Chickens have great memories

9.)Chickens suffer immensely by the hands of humans

In the end, this has opened my eyes even more to the situation at hand when it comes to animals and I hope it has your too. We can now see that we are more alike to animals than you might believe!

News Release

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“I love this app,” said Emily Tree, a frequent user of Exercise Capitalist. “I just went grocery shopping, and I saved $15 from using the discounts that I earned from Exercise Capitalist. This app is what motivates me to work out.”

The app also keeps track of your workouts for you through a GPS and a heart monitor rate, so all you have to do is keep jogging and watch the points roll in.  “Exercise capitalist saves me so much time because it keeps track of my workouts for me,” says John Smith, owner of Planet Fitness. “When switching back and forth between cardio, free weights, and deadlifts, I don’t have to write down what exercises I completed. I look forward to checking my phone after every workout session to see the progress that I’ve made, and all the discounts that I’ve earned.”

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Journal #26:

After completing our group news release for Exercise Capitalist, there many things that I have learned not only about the topic itself but also in terms of group work. My group and I have been working on this project for a couple weeks now, so I have learned alot about how to work in a group in a professional environment.  I’ve worked in groups many times but I dont think Ive been working in a team for a longer period of time. This allowed all our voices and ideas to be heard from one another, which really led to some good collaboration on our product. It was really helpful for my group and I to be able to do the dry run and receive feedback. It allowed us to see some imperfection within our design that we didn’t see before. I’ve never completed a news release before and I don’t think my group has either, so it was a new genre of writing that we experienced. It was interesting to create though because it made us feel as though our product was validated or even that we are headed in the right direction. It was really cool to see where our product started from to where it led to and In my opinion you can see the progress pretty clearly!

Learning Outcome #6

Outcome 6:  Control sentence-level error (grammar, punctuation, spelling)

Writing to me is a form of words being put into a structure a certain way that it makes the words flow. In my opinion, grammar, punctuation, and spelling is the hardest part of any essay you will ever write. For reasons such as if these skills aren’t used correctly it can make your words and sentences sound choppy, un-professional, and childish. When it comes to my writing career this is something I’ve struggled with hard, spelling and grammar has never been my strong suit, and in all honesty I still think I rely on grammar and spell correct to fix my mistakes. I have grown throughout this year in English 110 when it comes to sentence level error because I have taken more time to think over what I’m writing and allow the correct usage of grammar and spelling. The one grammatical error I seem to always misuse is commas, and I believe I’ve learned how to correctly structure them into sentences allowing my words to flow nicely.  In my third essay, I believe it used commas to the best of my ability as seen in Figure 1. While going through the work that we did throughout the year I found a poem that demonstrated very unique and cool ways to use grammar, commas, and punctuation in their poem. I thought this was really interesting so in my third essay I incorporated a segment from the poem to show the structure and meaning of it, as seen in Figure 2.

FIGURE 1: ” History put into Perspective”
FIGURE 2: “History put into Perspective”

Learning Outcome #5

Outcome 5:  Document their work using appropriate conventions (MLA)

When it comes to writing formatting and citations are one of the most important skills for you to start to get familiar with and understand. Formatting and citations are something you will be using throughout the rest of your college career, and most times Professors will require different formats depending on what you are writing. In this case, in English 110 we mainly used MLA format for our essays throughout the year. I’ve used MLA format the most in my life and have become very familiar with it. Formatting and citations aren’t just for you but they are used to give proper recognition for their words, that aren’t yours. This comes in forms such as quotations marks, in text citations, as well as properly using the authors names in your writing. As we all know, improperly or failing to cite words that aren’t yours come with serious consequences. At the beginning of this class I was a little rusty using MLA citations because in highschool we would just use a citation generator and not write it ourselves, so this set me back a bit when It came to writing them myself. Later on in the semester I began to understand what goes where in the situation and eventually was able to cite an article or paper without looking at guides to help create a citation, I began to know what information to look for when it came to citations. In my first essay, as seen in Figure 1 and 2, my citations were very minimal and just met the requirements but then looking at my third essay, as seen in Figure 3and 4, I started to use more citation sources and incorporate them better into my writing.

FIGURE 1: “Todays Social Media’s Influences on Human Relationships”
FIGURE 2: Todays Social Media’s Influences on Human Relationships”
FIGURE 3: History put into Perspective”
FIGURE 4: History put into Perspective”

Learning Outcome #4

Outcome 4: Be able to critique their own and others’ work by emphasizing global revision early in the writing process and local revision later in the process.

When It comes to writing and finalizing an essay the last step before final touches is peer reviews, and this can be from fellow classmates and even your Professor. In my opinion peer review is the most helpful part of my writing journey, it allows me to make the corrections that I don’t normally see myself at first as well as allowing my writing to grow. Peer review allows my writing to grow because by reading what my fellow classmates and Professor has written allows me to see new perspectives and what I’ve written and gives me a chance to expand my claims and ideas. What I like most about peer editing is that it’s not just about fixing and correcting others’ work but it also gives you a chance to support and give positive feedback on sections you believe work. We have done a lot of work with peer review in English 110, with multiple classmates, sometimes even two classmates would incorporate their comments.

When I first started to learn how to peer review it was as simple as correcting grammatical errors but then I have learned over time that it’s so much more. It has allowed me to see that peer reviews is a tool not only to help you but use for support, ideas, extensions, and so much more. When I was peer reviewing for our final essay in English 110, I made sure I provided quality feedback on their work to make sure they were able to clearly see what needed to be fixed or what’s good. In this specific essay I gave feedback alot on where there was room for extensions, as well as places where I believed what they provided was good. During the process of peer reviewing their essay I used certain symbols that mean different things allowing it to be clear and organized, these symbols included “?” for parts where I had questions as well as using “+” to places where I could see some xpantion on the ideas. In the end, I believe the most important peer review you can recieve is the evaluation of your thesis, this allows the reader and the author to understand what the whole essay is based on , so in that case helpful advice on how to make a thesis more clear is always good.

FIGURE 1: “Jasmine Manteiga 3rd Essay”
FIGURE 2:Jasmine Manteiga 3rd Essay”
FIGURE 3: ” Jasmine Manteiga 3rd Essay”

Learning Outcome #3


Outcome 3:
Employ techniques of active reading, critical reading, and informal reading response for inquiry, learning, and thinking.

In my opinion, active reading is one of the most important factors that go into the prewriting stage, Active Reading allows you to fully grasp the text before making any conclusions and claims, this is something I believe I’m really good at after learning what to look for in the text. I struggled with this a bit in highschool for reasons I never knew what I should be looking for , I never retained the information I just read but after learning how to actively read and annotate it has allowed me to learn on a whole different level. After making my annotations, It always allows me to go back into the reading and look at the most important parts and see what exactly I need to know in more of an efficient pattern. We worked a lot with active reading and annotations this year in regards to many different styles of text and one of my favorites that we annotated, and even later wrote an essay on, was the essay “This is Water ” by David Foster. At first this was a very challenging piece to read and understand because I thought there were a lot of underlying meanings throughout the speech, but It was a great speech to be able to annotate and pull out the most important parts Wallace was giving. Some of the really intresting underlying meanings that I was able to annotate is about life purposes such as living life on a deafult setting, on choice and thinking, and even on our awareness and conciousness (as seen in Figures 5-7). When I annotated this I used the annotations tools of understanding, questioning, relating, challenging or extending, and rhetorical tools to understand the text better as seen in Figures 1-4.

The most Important annotations styles I like to use when active reading are the annotations where you extend on an idea or even the ability to ask questions through out the text. Asking questions and extending on what is written helps me form my own opinions as well as the ability to fully grasp the concepts of the piece, it allows my mind to start rolling so when Its time to reflect on the piece. Making annotations while active reading also plays into the process of my writing because it allows me to form claims around my questions and ideas, and turn them into paragraphs, while at the same time analysing and connecting them into my writing. I enjoy using the provided guidelines of annotations so I get a base knowledge of what I need to know , but then I usually like to go off and sometimes add some personal notes such as asking why something happened, or just what ever pops in my head first just to get my thoughts flowing.

FIGURES 1-4: “This is Water”
FIGURES 5-7: “This is Water” – underlying meanings
(https://www.sloww.co/this-is-water-david-foster-wallace/)

Learning Outcome #2

Outcome 2: Be able to integrate their ideas with others using summary, paraphrase, quotation, analysis, and synthesis of relevant sources.

When it comes to text engagement I believe that it plays many roles in making your writing stronger. The roles text engagements play in writing can be something as small as bringing up an idea or transition to something as big as taking multiple authors and connecting them. When I first came into this english class I didn’t really know how to write correctly as some might say, my highschool wasn’t very essay based. So when I had to connect two authors and put them into conversation with each other it wasn’t the easiest for me, and as seen in my first essay it wasn’t the best. I then started to learn how to correctly put authors’ ideas and concepts into one claim and connect them both by adding quotes and unpacking them to prove the connection. This process for me usually was finding a claim from both authors that stood out to me that relates to what i’m writing about and then I would brainstorm on how these two quotes play their way into the topic, once I established that I would set them up into a barclay paragraph and explain. Or even if the topics didn’t connect, they complicated each other. I would do the same. In my first  essay I portrayed a good use of the authors ideas and evidence and pushed it further then what the author once said, sort of like complicating it but still making the connection, as seen in Figure 1. I wanted to look into my second essay and see what I gave in there, and I found a good section where I took the authors ideas and evidence and then incorporated myself into that conversation, as seen in FIgure 2.

Throughout this English 110 class we worked a lot with summaries and paraphrases when doing are essays. I tended not to use these techniques in my work before this class, only because I didn’t know much about how to use them. My work was most to quote heavy and didn’t look professional, after learning how to use these techniques correctly it allows my work to have correct citations as well as giving my work more of a professional look. I wanted to provide a section of my essay that shows where I have learned and noticed that I could provide a summary or a paraphrase in the introduction rather then being vague, as seen in Figure 3.

FIGURE 1: “Todays Social Media Influences on Human Relationships”
FIGURE 2: “Empathy, Perception, and the Power of Thought”
FIGURE 3: “Today Social Media Influences on Human Relationships”

Learning Outcome #1

Objective 1: Demonstrate the ability to approach writing as a recursive process that requires substantial revision of drafts for content, organization, and clarity (global revision), as well as editing and proofreading (local revision).

Throughout my freshman year of english class it has allowed me to learn that there isn’t a certain way to do things when It comes to writing. I have learned that writing comes with many steps and one of the most important steps is the revision process. Before coming to college writing to me was just as simple as gathering ideas, writing the essay and occasionally having someone read over my writing once. It’s crazy to me that I thought that was efficient and led my work to be finalized so fast. Now that my eyes have opened to the multiple steps , including reading, outlines, rough drafts, and detailed peer comments form both classmates and my professor. It has allowed me to improve on my writing and given me the chance to be more of an efficient writer.

When writing my first draft I found that I lacked a lot of my own opinions and voice as well as connection between the authors we were provided. So after learning deeper into the writing processes for future essays I worked on adding my own opinions and voice more and more throughout the essay, rather than having the essay be so author and quote heavy. An example from an essay I did this year where I added my own personal voice was in my final essay as seen in Figure 1. Through each essay I wrote for this class I started to utilize more and more tools provided to me to revise my essays because I noticed I became more comfortable applying them. When looking at my first or second essay in comparison to my final essay there are some noticeable differences, and I believe you can see the self confidence grow greater in each essay. Coming from a High School that did not assign much essays and not having much practice with them it stunted my writing abilities greatly, but now I can say after passing in my final essay that I have grown as a writer from doing 1 essay every 6 months to now being able to write an efficient professional essay when given. The part of revision that I focused most on during my final essay was working on strengthening the connection between authors when I put text into conversation with each other, which I even struggled with at the beginning this year. An example where I was able to portray a strong connection between authors was in my final essay as seen in Figures 2 and 3.

FIGURE 1: “History put into Perspective”
FIGURE 2: “History put into Perspective”
FIGURE 3: “History put into Perspective”